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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

Manager, The group name of my musician is alpha band that was created by our senior. This group is providing a training of music and dancing class to his client, its a very large company of company in my area that is providing the facilities of music. One of the most common and popular things of our is that peoples are cooperative and kindfull. They taught us very sincerely and provided a very long training session to his client, our musicians group has many opportunities for people they are came for training. the groups are arranged different activities related for music to entertain the people. By the company rules and policies they are provided only friday and tuesday evening for training and musical class. But the groups provided alternate day for our client to facilitate them. these days are having same activities as other day that are mentioned in rules of musician groups.
Manager,

The
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name of my musician is alpha band that
was created
by our senior. This
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group
is providing a
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training
of music and dancing
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class
to his client,
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a
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very
large
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in my area
that is
providing the facilities of music.

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kindfull
. They taught us
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very
sincerely
and provided a
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very
long
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training
session to his client, our musicians
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group
has
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many
opportunities for
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people
they are
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came
for
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training
.
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the
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groups
are arranged
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different
activities related for music to entertain the
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people
.

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company
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and policies they
are provided
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only
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friday
and
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tuesday
evening for
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training
and musical
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class
.
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But
the
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groups
provided alternate day for our client to facilitate them.
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these
days are having same activities as other day that
are mentioned
in
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of musician
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groups
.

IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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