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You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: explain which course you are interested in say what you know about the university explain why you should receive the scholarship

You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: explain which course you are interested in say what you know about the university explain why you should receive the scholarship Beww
I am writing this letter to inquire about a scholarship program that your university offers to foreign students. I have already finished my bachelor’s degree in Economics, and now I want to pursue a master’s degree in the same subject. I have already learned quite a lot about your university by reading everything on its website. Needless to say, I like everything about your university which includes very modern and well-equipped classrooms, universal curriculum, affordable hostel accommodation, and highly qualified and experienced professors and lecturers. However, what I find the most impressive about your university is its very high campus placement rate which is about 75 per cent. I know it is not easy to get a scholarship at your university, but I think that my good grades in bachelor degree (GPA 3. 90 out of 4) and a high score in TOEFL (623 out of 677) would make me eligible to receive a scholarship in my subject. I look forward to hearing your response on my eligibility to receive a scholarship at your university. Yours faithfully, Kishor Gupta
I am writing this letter to inquire about a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scholarship
program that your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
offers to foreign students. I have already finished my bachelor’s degree in Economics, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
I want to pursue a master’s degree in the same subject.

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I
have already learned quite a lot about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
by reading everything on its website. Needless to say, I like everything about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
which includes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
modern and well-equipped classrooms, universal curriculum, affordable hostel accommodation, and
highly
qualified and experienced professors and lecturers.
However
, what I find the most impressive about your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
is its
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high campus placement rate which is about 75 per cent.

I know it is not easy to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scholarship
at your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
,
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but
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
grades in bachelor degree (GPA 3. 90 out of 4) and a high score in TOEFL (623 out of 677) would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
me eligible to receive a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scholarship
in my subject.

I look forward to hearing your response on my eligibility to receive a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
scholarship
at your university.

Yours
faithfully
,

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IELTS letter You are interested in applying for a scholarship program to study at a foreign university. Write a letter to inquire about the course. In your letter: explain which course you are interested in say what you know about the university explain why you should receive the scholarship

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
178 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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