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You are going to another country to study .you would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to Skype a friend who lives there for some help write a letter to this friend in your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to Skype a friend who lives there for some help write a letter to this friend in your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job x7aN
Dear Sally My departure date for newzeland is drawing near and I am busy with preparation I have enrolled at an institution called ABC English in Washington for a six month advance course, full time it is quite expensive but I am hopeful of improving my pronunciation expeciallyTo assist in covering the cost of my study. I aim to find a part time job. not only are the college fee rather than high but also I know that rental accommodation in the capital city will not be cheap. To say nothing of food and heating expenses so I would very much like to arrange so temporary employment before I arriveI was wondering if you could ask around amount your friend and colleagues to see if anyone want a house cleaning gardener or nanny for their child. I know you have a wide social network work in Wellington which you could canvas for me if you wouldn't mind I'd be so gratefulI look forward to see you soon. Best wishesMargot
Dear Sally My departure date for
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newzeland
is drawing
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near and
I am busy with preparation I have enrolled at an institution called ABC English in Washington for a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "six-month"
six month
advance course, full time it is quite expensive
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but
I am hopeful of improving my pronunciation
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expeciallyTo
assist in covering the cost of my study. I aim to find a
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
part time
job.
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not
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only
are the college fee
rather
than high
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but
also
I know that rental accommodation in the capital city will not be
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cheap
. To say nothing of food and heating expenses
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so
I would
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very
much like to arrange
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so
temporary employment
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before
I
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arriveI
was wondering if you could ask around amount your friend and colleagues to
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see
if anyone
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want
a
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house
cleaning gardener or nanny for their child. I know you have a wide social network work in Wellington which you could canvas for me if you wouldn't mind I'd be
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so
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gratefulI
look forward to
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see
you
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soon
. Best
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
wishesMargot

IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. you would like to do a part time job while you are studying so you want to Skype a friend who lives there for some help write a letter to this friend in your letter give details of your study plans explain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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168 words
5.0
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