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You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services and explain when you want to visit the Snowy Mountains, how long you will stay, how many students are in your party, and what accommodation you will require.

You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services and explain when you want to visit the Snowy Mountains, how long you will stay, how many students are in your party, and what accommodation you will require. WQLk
Dear Sir, My name is John Peter, lecturer of St Antony’s college, Perth. I am writing this letter to inform you that, we are planning to arrange a trip to our students as a part of their winter activity and the first place that come into our mind is Snowy Mountains in New South Wales. We have planned to stay in your hostel and we are a group of 30 students and 3 lectures and we require 3 dormitories for 10 students each which is attached and 3 single rooms which are also attached with bath rooms. The probable date of the trip is 15th of December 2020 and it last for 5 days. It will be great full if you provide food for everyone throughout the journey. Please let us know the availability of rooms and any other formalities needed before our arrival. As I am the in-charge of the tour you can contact me for further communication. You can contact me at 1234567890. Wishes and regards, Yours faithfully John Peter.
Dear Sir,

My name is John Peter, lecturer of St Antony’s college, Perth. I am writing this letter to inform you that, we are planning to arrange a trip to our students as a part of their winter activity and the
first
place that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
into our mind is Snowy Mountains in New South Wales.

We have planned to stay in your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
hostel and
we are a group of 30 students and 3
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
lectures and
we require 3 dormitories for 10 students each which
is attached
and 3 single rooms which are
also
attached with bath rooms. The probable date of the trip is 15th of December 2020 and it last for 5 days. It will be great full if you provide food for everyone throughout the journey.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
us know the availability of rooms and any other formalities needed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
our arrival. As I am the in-charge of the tour you can contact me for
further
communication. You can contact me at 1234567890.

Wishes and regards,

Yours
faithfully


John Peter.

IELTS letter You are organising a trip to the Snowy Mountains in New South Wales for a group of students from Perth in Western Australia. Write to the manager of Student Hostel Services and explain when you want to visit the Snowy Mountains, how long you will stay, how many students are in your party, and what accommodation you will require.

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