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large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money,either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years ,or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. *describe the bebefits of sponsoring the sports team *summarise the bebefits of paying for the concerts *say how you think the company should spend the money.

large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. *describe the bebefits of sponsoring the sports team *summarise the bebefits of paying for the concerts *say how you think the company should spend the money. eGpB
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know about the benefits of sponsoring the sports team in our area. By making children’s sports team, it will be very much effective now as well as in future progress for those children who want to make their career in the sports. Children will get appropriate guidance and the training for the perticular sports from recognise coach person. In contrast, company pay for the concerts, these will also be benefited such as preparing for concerts’s stage, the public longe, prepare for the media advertisement and the participants accomodation. In addition, the juge whom will be invited for concerts to make final decision need to pay according to their charges of the fees along with their accomodation and the food charge. So these are also very coastly and finding out sponsor for funding for two concerts are very difficult. By analysing all above benefits for both options, I think better training of eduction about sports from well known coach and his staff prepares our children for the sports team. Sports training for two years give positive impact on children for future prospective too. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Amita Dholakia
Dear Sir or Madam,

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all above benefits for both options, I
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from well known coach and his staff prepares our
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team.
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training for two years give
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for future prospective too.

Thank you for your consideration.

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Dholakia

IELTS letter large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. *describe the bebefits of sponsoring the sports team *summarise the bebefits of paying for the concerts *say how you think the company should spend the money.

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