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You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. v.5

You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. v. 5
Dear Mrs Shelton, I am the general secretary of the “Keep Your City Green" committee of our municipality area, and, as the name of this committee implies, its job is to mobilise and motivate the good citizens of our municipality to make them aware of the benefits of green environment in and around our municipality. We also work on tree plantation. And as a part of this effort of ours, we try to organise a discussion session quarterly, in which, renowned, respected and learned residents of our community take part and express their valuable opinions about the progress of our involvements and efforts. But, to make the efforts of this committee even more acceptable, engaging and successful among the citizens of our area, we could certainly use the valuable insights from the honourable MP of our constituent. Now, I fully understand that our honourable MP is a very busy person because of his political works and other priorities, but I would surely like to hope that he would squeeze some time out of his busy work schedule to attend our discussion session which will be held from 10. 00 am to 12. 30 pm on 15the September. Yours faithfully, George Tobias
Dear Mrs Shelton,

I am the general secretary of the “
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Keep
Your City Green
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committee of our municipality area, and, as the name of this committee implies, its job is to
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mobilise
and motivate the
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good
citizens of our municipality to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
them aware of the benefits of green environment in and around our municipality. We
also
work on tree plantation.

And as a part of this effort of ours, we try to
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organise
a discussion session quarterly, in which, renowned, respected and learned residents of our community
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
and express their valuable opinions about the progress of our involvements and efforts.
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But
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the efforts of this committee even more acceptable, engaging and successful among the citizens of our area, we could
certainly
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use
the valuable insights from the
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honourable
MP of our constituent.

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Now
, I
fully
understand that our
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honourable
MP is a
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very
busy person
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because
of his political works and other priorities,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I would
surely
like to hope that he would squeeze
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some
time out of his busy work schedule to attend our discussion session which will
be held
from 10. 00 am to 12. 30 pm on 15the September.

Yours
faithfully
,

George Tobias
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS letter You are organising a local committee meeting. You would like a local MP to attend the meeting to contribute to a discussion about green areas in the community. v. 5

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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