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You are organising a charity event at your college to raise money for the local orphanage. Write a letter to a private business.

You are organising a charity event at your college to raise money for the local orphanage. Write a letter to a private business. 52ELD
Dear Mr Shelton, I am wring to you on behalf of the Estover Community College. Our college team are going to organise a charity event on the 25th of January, at 11 p. m. at the town club. The main purpose of the event is to support our local orphanage. We would be honoured if you and your partners could come and participate in the event. During the event, we will try to focus on our attention some issues, like involve as many people as possible and selling more products in low prices which are mady by college student and local hadicrafts. We hope that this event will be very interesting for you and you will not miss the opportunity of being sponsor for the charity. Please, let me know your response beforehand as soon as possible. Looking forward to seeing you then. I included some directions so that you do not get lost. Yours sincerely.
Dear Mr Shelton, I am wring to you on behalf of the
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Estover
Community College. Our college team are going to
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organise
a charity
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event
on the 25th of January, at 11 p. m. at the town club. The main purpose of the
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event
is to support our local orphanage. We would be
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honoured
if you and your partners could
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come
and participate in the
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event
. During the
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event
, we will try to focus on our attention
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some
issues, like involve as
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many
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people
as possible and selling more products in low prices which are
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mady
by college student and local
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hadicrafts
. We hope that this
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event
will be
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very
interesting for you and you will not miss the opportunity of being
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sponsor
for the charity.
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Please
,
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let
me know your response beforehand as
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soon
as possible. Looking forward to seeing you then. I included
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some
directions
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so
that you do not
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get
lost. Yours
sincerely
.

IELTS letter You are organising a charity event at your college to raise money for the local orphanage. Write a letter to a private business.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
156 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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