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You are hoing to apply a job position as a tour guide

You are hoing to apply a job position as a tour guide bxG2X
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to apply for a position a tour guide which advertised in the newspaper "Guardian"s last edition on 17 th of October. Firstly, I am thirty five years old and graduated the University in 2008 with a degree in Tourism Studies. I got valuable certificates about Computer graphic design and English. I have just hold 8 band score certificate from International European Language Testing System. Secondly, I got a Bachelorʼs Diploma German language knowing this, many companies intersted about me. I can speak fluently Russian too. Moreover, I am very sociable and experienced as much in this job and I can easly solve the problems which occur in work place. I have enclosed a copy of my CV. If you hire me, you will never sorry about it. Neverthless I am very busy, I would be glad, if I will attend the interview in any time convienent for you. Iʼm looking forward to your soon replay. Yours sincerly, Kate Adamson.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for a position a tour guide which advertised in the newspaper
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Guardian
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17 th
of October.

Firstly
, I am
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thirty five
years
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and
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graduated
the University in 2008 with a degree in Tourism Studies. I
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got
valuable certificates about Computer graphic design and English. I have
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hold 8 band score certificate from International European Language Testing System.

Secondly
, I
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got
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Bachelorʼs
Diploma German language knowing this,
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many
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companies
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intersted
about me. I can speak
fluently
Russian too.

Moreover
, I am
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very
sociable and experienced as much in this job and I can
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easly
solve the problems which occur in work place. I have enclosed a copy of my CV. If you hire me, you
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will never sorry
about it.
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Neverthless
I am
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very
busy, I would be glad, if I will attend the interview in any time
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convienent
for you.

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Iʼm
looking forward to your
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replay.

Yours
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sincerly
,

Kate Adamson.
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IELTS letter You are hoing to apply a job position as a tour guide

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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