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You are going to learn English write a teacher about this

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I am writing to show my willingness to learn English skills. While searching for a good English teacher, I saw your advertisement in a social media. You are highly qualified and have a rich experience in some fields. Thereafter I asked about you from one of my friend. She really praised you and your teaching methodology and motivated me to join your classes. I have recently graduated a Bachelor Degree. I am going to continuing my studies for the CEFR certificate. Especially I must improve my writing, listening and speaking skills. I would like to ask about fees, date of joining and the timings of the classes. I would be highly obliged, if you could spare some time to teach me. Looking forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully Lilli Adam

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show
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skills
. While searching for a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 English teacher, I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
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media
. You are highly
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some
 fields.

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Thereafter
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join
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I have recently graduated a Bachelor Degree. I am Did you mean "going to continue"?going to continue
going to continuing
 my studies for the CEFR certificate. Especially
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must
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :ameliorate
improve
 my writing, listening and speaking This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
.

I would like to ask about fees, date of joining and the timings of the classes. I would be highly
 obliged, if you could spare This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 time to teach me.

Looking forward to hearing from you

Yours faithfully


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 Adam

IELTS letter You are going to learn English write a teacher about this

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American English

7 paragraphs

130 words

This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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