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"You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans, explain why you want to get a part-time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job."

"You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans, explain why you want to get a part-time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job. " g7bg
Dear Roxy, How are you? I hope you are healthy and happy. I'm writing to let you know that I will move to Toronto, Canada in a few months to study and ask you some help to find me a part-time job. I have enrolled at Toronto University and the course duration is 2 years full-time, majoring in hotel management. My classes would be 5 days per week and 4 hours per day from 9 am to 1 pm. As I will have a leasure time everyday, I would like to avail this opportunity to do some part-time work. This will help me in covering the cost of my study, rental of accommodation and household expenses. I was wondering if you could ask around among your friends and colleagues to see if anyone wants a house-cleaner or nanny for their children. I look forward to seeing you soon. Best Regards, Shawi
Dear Roxy,

How are you? I hope you are healthy and happy. I'm writing to
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you know that I will
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move
to Toronto, Canada in a few months to study and ask you
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some
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help
to find me a part-time job.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have enrolled at Toronto University and the course duration is 2 years full-time, majoring in hotel management. My classes would be 5 days per week and 4 hours per day from 9 am to 1 pm.

As I will have a
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leasure
time
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
, I would like to avail this opportunity to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
part-time work. This will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in covering the cost of my study, rental of accommodation and household expenses.

I was wondering if you could ask around among your friends and colleagues to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
if anyone wants a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
-cleaner or nanny for their children.

I look forward to seeing you
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soon
.

Best Regards,
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Shawi
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IELTS letter "You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter, give details of your study plans, explain why you want to get a part-time job, suggest how your friend could help you find a job. "

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
150 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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