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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job Write at least 150 words.

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job e607
Dear mary, How are you? hope this letter finds you well. it has been a long time we didn't meet. I'm writing to income you that I'm moving to Toronto, and I need some help from you regarding finding a job. I will come to your country for 5 months English course which is essential for my higher education. during the time of my study, I really want to do some part-time job because my saving is enough for renting accommodation only I have to cover all expenses such as food, transportation and all basic needs which could be difficult to manage in the beginning. Explaining my financial background is the statement of obvious. I think I'm mature enough to live independently. I was wondering if you could introduce me to your landlady who was searching for a reliable babysitter for her twins. if the opportunity is still available it would be a great chance for me to earning money and improve my speaking during socializing with others. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes Raya
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How are you?
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hope
this letter finds you well.
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it
has been a long time we didn't
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meet
. I'm writing to income you that I'm moving to Toronto, and I need
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some
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help
from you regarding finding a job.

I will
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come
to your country for 5 months English course which is essential for my higher education.
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during
the time of my study, I
really
want to do
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some
part-time job
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because
my saving is
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enough
for renting accommodation
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only
I
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have to
cover all expenses such as food, transportation and all basic needs which could be difficult to manage in the beginning.

Explaining my financial background is the statement of obvious. I
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think
I'm mature
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enough
to
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live
independently
.

I was wondering if you could introduce me to your landlady who was searching for a reliable babysitter for her twins.
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if
the opportunity is
still
available it would be a great chance for me to earning money and
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improve
my speaking during socializing with others.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Best wishes

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Raya

IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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178 words
6.0
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