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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter · give details of your study plans · explain why you want to get a part time job · suggest how your friend could help you find a job

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter · give details of your study plans · explain why you want to get a part time job · suggest how your friend could help you find a job 6jjK
Dear Monica, I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to seek some information about the part time jobs in Canada as I have planned to pursue my Master from Canada. I will be arriving at Alberta, Canada next week and my course at Alberta Management Institute will commence after three days of my arrival. I am doing my Masters in Management. Its a two year full time course having 12 subjects each year. I am pretty excited for this new academic journey. Along with the course we have an option to do a part time job. As you know that, I have taken a loan for this Overseas study. I need to repay it as soon as possible and don't want to put much burden on parents. So, I am thinking of doing a part time job which could help me to take care of my expenses and would also help me for paying my semester fees. I would kindly request you to help me by providing my reference at your work place. It would also be great if you pass on this request to your other friends who could also refer me. This will improve the chances of getting he part time job quick. Also help me with the list of work places who can offer me a part time job which would not hamper my studies. Best Regards, XYZ
Dear Monica,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to seek
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information about the
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in Canada as I have planned to pursue my Master from Canada.

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I
will be arriving at Alberta, Canada
next
week and my course at Alberta Management Institute will commence after three days of my arrival.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am doing my Masters in Management.
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Its
a
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two year
full
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time
course having 12 subjects each year. I am pretty excited for this new academic journey.

Along with the course we have an option to do a
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part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
. As you know that, I have taken a loan for this Overseas study. I need to repay it as
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soon
as possible and don't want to put much burden on parents.
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So
, I am thinking of doing a
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part
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time
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job
which could
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help
me to take care of my expenses and would
also
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help
me for paying my semester fees.

I would kindly request you to
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help
me by providing my reference at your work place. It would
also
be great if you pass on this request to your other friends who could
also
refer me. This will
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improve
the chances of getting he
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part
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time
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job
quick.
Also
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help
me with the list of work places who can offer me a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
part
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
which would not hamper my studies.

Best Regards,

XYZ

IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter · give details of your study plans · explain why you want to get a part time job · suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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234 words
6.0
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