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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying 56O3B
Dear Tom, It was long time to contact with you until I got your email last night. I can't tell you how glad I'm to know that you are doing great. I would like to share a wonderful news with you that I got an admission in 2 year master program at the prestige institute of Biotechnology at University of Leeds, England and I will join the institute in the coming winter semester. As you are well aware of my fiananical situation especially when we were studying together and even I am coming to England on patial scholarship that would only covered my tution fee. Nevertheless, for accomodation and covering other living expenses I have to do a part-time job. Luckily, all my classes will be completed in the morning session, I hope I will have sufficent time to do a part-time job in the late afternoon. I remebered you informed me before that you adopted your new part-time very well and enjoying a lot. I believe you have great experience and much familiar with the city with many positive vibes. I hope you will assist me and possibily introduce some part-time job oppertunities there. Let me know if you need anything from here, I will bring it for you. What about your favourite coffee? I can't wait to see you, Best wishes, ABC
Dear Tom,

It was long time to contact with you until I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
your email last night. I can't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you how glad I'm to know that you are doing great. I would like to share
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "wonderful news".
a wonderful news
with you that I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
an admission in 2 year master
Possible agreement error. The noun 'program' seems to be countable, so consider using: "programs".
program
at the prestige institute of Biotechnology at University of Leeds, England and I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the institute in the coming winter semester.

As you are well aware of my
Possible spelling mistake found.
fiananical
situation
especially
when we were studying together and even I am coming to England on
Possible spelling mistake found.
patial
scholarship that would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
covered my
Possible spelling mistake found.
tution
fee.
Nevertheless
, for
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accomodation
and covering other living expenses I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
do a part-time job. Luckily, all my classes will
be completed
in the morning session, I hope I will have
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sufficent
time to do a part-time job in the late afternoon.

I
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remebered
you informed me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
that you adopted your new part-time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
well and enjoying a lot. I believe you have great experience and much familiar with the city with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
vibes.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope you will assist me and
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possibily
introduce
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
part-time job
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oppertunities
there.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me know if you need anything from here, I will bring it for you. What about your
Possible spelling mistake. 'favourite' is British English.
favourite
coffee?

I can't wait to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you,

Best wishes,

ABC
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IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
223 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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