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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job 3qXN
Dear Neev, Hope you're doing well! In continuation our last conversation, I'am delighted to inform you that I have secured my admission in Masters in Engineering Management at The North Eastern University, Boston. I will be be landing in Boston on the 15th of April 2021 and shall see you soon. Since, the course I'am pursuing will be for a two years tenure I wish to work part-time alongside. It will help me in multiple ways from future perspective. Hands-on exposure can definitely assist me in my full-time job as well as help me cover my expenses to some extent. Looking at the current scenario and being a novice I have my doubts if of getting through a job easily. However, I truly feel you would be resourceful in finding me a job out there since you are a local and also a experienced in a similar field. Maybe your network and social circle could strike a cord with the type of part-time job I'am looking for. Hope once I'am there we will be able to brainstorm together and figure a way out before my college regime begins. Look forward to seeing you really soon. Thanking You, Priyanka Dawra
Dear
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Neev
,

Hope you're doing well!

In continuation our last conversation, I'
am delighted
to inform you that I have secured my admission in Masters in Engineering Management at The North Eastern University, Boston. I will be
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be
landing in Boston on the 15th of April 2021 and shall
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see
you
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soon
.

Since, the course I'
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am
pursuing will be for a two years tenure I wish to work part-time alongside. It will
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help
me in multiple ways from future perspective. Hands-on exposure can definitely assist me in my full-time
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job
as well
as
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help
me cover my expenses to
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some
extent.

Looking at the
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current
scenario and being a novice I have my doubts if of getting through a
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job
easily
.
However
, I
truly
feel you would be resourceful in finding me a
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job
out there since you are a local and
also
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a
experienced in a similar field. Maybe your network and social circle could
Did you mean "strike a chord"?
strike a cord
with the type of part-time
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job
I'
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am
looking for.

Hope once I'am there we will be able to brainstorm together and figure a way out
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before
my college regime
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begins
. Look forward to seeing you
really
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soon
.

Thanking You,

Priyanka
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Dawra
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IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • give details of your study plans • explain why you want to get a part-time job • suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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8 paragraphs
198 words
6.0
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