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You are going to another country for studying. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying. Ask for friend some help to find a job.

You are going to another country for studying. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying. Ask for friend some help to find a job. Q8bXP
Dear Nora. How is your doing? Is your studies good? I am going to your country for studying next month. As informed you on my previous letter, I decided to study in abroad to improve my skill. I need to do some job while I am studying there. You know it will be more free time during studies. That's why I would like to do a part time job after studying. It is also helpful for improving my comunication skills. It takes a long time to find a job. In order to find a job I will have to arrive in advance I need a place to stay. But I booked a ticket before starting my studies. I want you to help me to find a job. Hence you live there and are aware conditions of finding a job. I would be happy if you helped me find a job. I will bring some presents from my country. Write me. Best wishes. Andy.
Dear Nora.

How is your doing? Is your
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studies
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good
? I am going to your country for studying
next
month.

As informed you on my previous letter, I decided to
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study
in abroad to
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improve
my
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skill
. I need to do
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some
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job
while I am studying there. You know it will be more free time during
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studies
. That's why I would like to do a
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part time
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job
after studying. It is
also
helpful for improving my
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comunication
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skills
.

It takes a long time to
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find
a
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job
. In order to
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find
a
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job
I will
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have to
arrive in advance I need a place to stay.
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But
I booked a ticket
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before
starting my
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studies
. I want you to
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help
me to
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find
a
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job
.
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Hence
you
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live
there and are aware conditions of finding a job.

I would be happy if you
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helped
me
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find
a
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job
. I will bring
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some
presents from my country.

Write me.

Best wishes. Andy.

IELTS letter You are going to another country for studying. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying. Ask for friend some help to find a job.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
163 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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