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You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

I am writing in connection with a missing or stolen debit card from your bank. This is an urgent matter as the bank card could prove dangerous in the hands of the wrong person. Just yesterday, I received a letter from your bank’s head office. It stated that my new bank card was enclosed and asked me to acknowledge receipt. However, when the envelope arrived in my mailbox, it was in a tattered state. More importantly, the debit card which was supposed to be included, was missing. I checked and rechecked around the mailbox, but found nothing. I am concerned that someone has gone through my mail and possibly stolen the card. For this reason I request that you cancel the existing debit card immediately. The debit card in question is related to my account number 64729401 at your Bay and Bloor branch. After it has been cancelled, please arrange to send me a new one, as I need to travel overseas next week and will need to carry the new bank card with me. Thank you kindly in advance, Yours faithfully, Ms Brenda Holster
I am writing in connection with a missing or stolen debit
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card
from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
. This is an urgent matter as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
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card
could prove
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dangerous
in the hands of the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
person.

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Just
yesterday, I received a letter from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank’s
head office. It stated that my new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
was enclosed
and asked me to acknowledge receipt.
However
, when the envelope arrived in my mailbox, it was in a tattered state. More
importantly
, the debit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
which
was supposed
to
be included
, was missing. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
and rechecked around the mailbox,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
found nothing. I
am concerned
that someone has gone through my mail and
possibly
stolen the card.

For this reason
I request that you cancel the existing debit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
immediately. The debit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
in question
is related
to my account number 64729401 at your Bay and Bloor branch. After it has
been cancelled
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
arrange to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
me a new one, as I need to travel overseas
next
week and will need to carry the new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bank
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
card
with me.

Thank you kindly in advance,

Yours
faithfully
,

Ms Brenda Holster

IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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  American English
6 paragraphs
184 words
6.0
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