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You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:  Explain your situation  describe the accommodation you require  say when you will need it

You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:  Explain your situation  describe the accommodation you require  say when you will need it Dy3p
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inquire about the accommodation you offer for the training participants at your college. I am looking for a single room and hoping that you can arrange me one during my training. I will take part in the training course titled 'Persuasive Communication for Technology Professionals' at your college from July 2020 to September 2021. To successfully complete the course, I would like to stay nearby. Hence, I would request you to arrange a living place for me. I would like a single room that I would not need to share with a roommate. Besides, I prefer an attached bathroom and the facilities of hot water. Finally, the room should be large enough and fully furnished. The course will start on 08 July 2020 and I would be thankful if you could find me a place to stay in during my three-month-long training course. I would be grateful for your help. Yours faithfully, Ms K Zonano
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inquire about the accommodation you offer for the training participants at your college. I am looking for a single room and hoping that you can arrange me one during my training.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will
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take part
in the training
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course
titled 'Persuasive Communication for Technology Professionals' at your college from July 2020 to September 2021. To
successfully
complete the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, I would like to stay nearby.
Hence
, I would request you to arrange a living place for me.

I would like a single room that I would not need to share with a roommate.
Besides
, I prefer an attached bathroom and the facilities of hot water.
Finally
, the room should be large
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enough
and
fully
furnished.

The
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course
will
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start
on 08 July 2020 and I would be thankful if you could find me a place to stay in during my three-month-long training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
. I would be grateful for your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Ms K
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Zonano

IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:  Explain your situation  describe the accommodation you require  say when you will need it

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164 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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