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You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:  Explain your situation  describe the accommodation you require  say when you will need it

You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:  Explain your situation  describe the accommodation you require  say when you will need it A5Qe
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to request you for arranging suitable accommodation for me during my training course at the City College, Greenmount, Northern Ireland. I am looking for a place to live in and I hope you would help me with this. I am searching for a shared room with a kitchen and attached bathroom. It would be great if someone is interested in sharing the room but she has to be a female who would take the same training course as mine. I would really appreciate a room with the hot water facility and I am looking for a furnished room. My course is going to commence on 10th September and I shall reach there a week earlier. Please arrange a living place for me in Greenmount as soon as possible so that I can successfully complete the course. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Namrata Jain
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you for arranging suitable accommodation for me during my training course at the City College,
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Greenmount
, Northern Ireland. I am looking for a place to
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live
in and I hope you would
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help
me with this.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am searching for a shared room with a kitchen and attached bathroom. It would be great if someone
is interested
in sharing the room
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but
she
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has to
be a female who would take the same training course as mine. I would
really
appreciate a room with the hot water
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
facility and
I am looking for a furnished room.

My course is going to commence on 10th September and I shall reach there a week earlier.
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Please
arrange a living place for me in
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Greenmount
as
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soon
as possible
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so
that I can
successfully
complete the course.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Namrata
Jain

IELTS letter You are going on a short training course at a college in Greenmount, Northern Ireland. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter:  Explain your situation  describe the accommodation you require  say when you will need it

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6.0
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