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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, give details of your course and your arrival/departure date explain your accommodation needs ask for information about getting to and from the college

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter in reference to my accommodation during my short term course at LSE, London. I have been enrolled in a 6 months short term certification course at LSE, London for the session February 2021 to July 2021. I will be arriving on the 26th of Feb 2021 at 9: 00 PM to join the registration process scheduled for the next day. However, the course requires me to stay near the campus for the tenure of my course for 5 months to regularly attend the college. During the period of my stay, I will be requiring a single room accommodation with food available twice a day and a regular broadband connection to cater to my internet needs. Besides these, I would prefer a peaceful place with not much interference. I would further like to request you to let me know about the transportation facilities available to and from the main college campus. It is expected of me to reach the college campus by 9: 00 AM in the morning and my classes will get over by 5: 00 PM, from Monday to Friday. I would appreciate it if you could let me know about the alternatives as well. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Kasim
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter in reference to my accommodation during my short term
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
at LSE, London.

I have
been enrolled
in a 6 months short term certification
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
at LSE, London for the session February 2021 to July 2021.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
will be arriving on the 26th of Feb 2021 at 9: 00 PM to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the registration process scheduled for the
next
day.

However
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
requires me to stay near the campus for the tenure of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
for 5 months to
regularly
attend the college. During the period of my stay, I will be requiring a single room accommodation with food available twice a day and a regular broadband connection to cater to my internet needs.
Besides
these, I would prefer a peaceful place with not much interference.

I would
further
like to request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know about the transportation facilities available to and from the main college campus. It is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
of me to reach the college campus by 9: 00
This is redundant. Consider using "AM".
AM in the morning
and my classes will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
over by 5: 00 PM, from Monday to Friday. I would appreciate it if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know about the alternatives
as well
.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Kasim
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IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, give details of your course and your arrival/departure date explain your accommodation needs ask for information about getting to and from the college

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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