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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, give details of your course and your arrival/departure date explain your accommodation needs ask for information about getting to and from the college

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, give details of your course and your arrival/departure date explain your accommodation needs ask for information about getting to and from the college jkx1
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to inform you that I have enrolled in short course in your college and I am looking for an accommodation for one month. I am travelling on 15th December Friday and my departure date is 14th January. Basically, I would like to study on paramedics thus I have taken short course for one month in your college. I am staying alone therefor one bedroom flat with kitchen suffice for me. Also, I have to prepare presentation after completing my course. Eargo I need to have good internet facility. I prefer my stay away from city area so I can concentrate on my study. Please provide information on travelling and nearest bus station or train station. If you can help me with transportation map that would be great help. I hope I will get required information before my arrival. Awaiting for your reply. Yours faithfully, Nilam Chauhan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I have enrolled in short course in your
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
college and
I am looking for
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "accommodation".
an accommodation
for one month. I am travelling on 15th December Friday and my departure date is 14th January.

Basically
, I would like to study on paramedics
thus
I have taken short course for one month in your college. I am staying alone therefor
It appears that a hyphen is missing.
one bedroom
flat with kitchen suffice for me.
Also
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
prepare presentation after completing my course.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Eargo
I need to have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
internet facility. I prefer my stay away from city area
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I can concentrate on my study.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
provide information on travelling and nearest bus station or train station.
“If” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
If
you can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me with transportation map that would be great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
. I hope I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
required information
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
my arrival.

Did you mean "awaiting" or "waiting for"?
Awaiting for
your reply.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Nilam
Chauhan

IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, give details of your course and your arrival/departure date explain your accommodation needs ask for information about getting to and from the college

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