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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college. JXe5
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter with regards to accommodation facilities in your college hostel. Currently, I am on vacation holidays for 15 days. I wanted to utilize these holidays to study a short-term course. I heard many positive responses about your college, this caused me to join a 10 days course on History in your college. I have booked my air tickets for Friday arrival and departure on Saturday early morning. I was new to this college and city and I am not ready to stay in outside PG or hotel. I was told that this university provides hostel facility for free of charge to registered students. Could you please help me with arranging a shared room with a person who also registered to same course. I am also keen to know about the laundry options that are available on weekly basis. As this hostel is located inside the university premises, I can come to college by walk which is also good for health. However, I am also spending my vacation here, so I wanted to know the transportation facilities that are available from college to city. I wish to opt for public transport, which is affordable and, I can keep some money aside for savings. Please respond at the earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, Manasa P
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
with regards to
accommodation facilities in your college hostel.

Currently
, I am on vacation holidays for 15 days. I wanted to utilize these holidays to study a short-term course. I heard
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
responses about your college, this caused me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
a 10 days course on History in your college.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have booked my air tickets for Friday arrival and departure on Saturday early morning.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was new to this college and
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
city and
I am not ready to stay in outside PG or hotel.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
was
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
that this university provides hostel facility for free of charge to registered students. Could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me with arranging a shared room with a person who
also
registered to same course. I am
also
keen to know about the laundry options that are available on weekly basis.

As this hostel
is located
inside the university premises, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to college by walk which is
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for health.
However
, I am
also
spending my vacation here,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I wanted to know the transportation facilities that are available from college to city. I wish to opt for public transport, which is affordable and, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
money aside for savings.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
respond at the earliest convenience.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Manasa
P
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IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is the college that you have not been to before Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter: Give details of your course and your arrival/departure date Explain your accommodation details Ask information about getting to and from the college.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
217 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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