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You are going abroad to study at a university. You need some information on accommodation for the duration of your course. Write a letter to the accommodation office. In your letter, - Tell them when you will arrive - Ask them about the types of accommodation they can offer,and - Explain to them what necessary things you may need

You are going abroad to study at a university. You need some information on accommodation for the duration of your course. Write a letter to the accommodation office. In your letter, - Tell them when you will arrive - Ask them about the types of accommodation they can offer, and - Explain to them what necessary things you may need dD02p
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to inform you that I will be attending English course, being held from Tuesday 20th April until 15th September, at the University of Oxford. I will be arriving on the afternoon of Monday 20th and will be leaving on the morning of Saturday the 14th of September, so I will require a suitable accommodation in the college Hall of Residence as I want to reserve it before I travel to the UK to join my classes. I am looking for a single room with attached bathroom and laundry facility. The room should be fully furnished and have good ventilation and ample natural light. Since I am a vegetarian, I would like to cook my own food, so accommodation with a fully equipped kitchen would be mandatory. If the above arrangement is not available in the Hall of Residence then I would not mind living with a local family who lived near the college. I would like to avoid daily long commuting to attend my classes and prefer a couple without children. Please notify me if you would like to have any additional information from my end. Waiting to hear from you soon regarding the availability of the accommodation and further process to reserve it. Yours faithfully,
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to inform you that I will be attending English course,
being held
from Tuesday 20th April until 15th September, at the University of Oxford.

I will be arriving on the afternoon of Monday 20th and will be leaving on the morning of Saturday the 14th of September,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I will require
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "suitable accommodation".
a suitable accommodation
in the college Hall of Residence as I want to reserve it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I travel to the UK to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
my classes.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am looking for a single room with attached bathroom and laundry facility. The room should be
fully
furnished and have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
ventilation and ample natural light. Since I am a vegetarian, I would like to cook my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
food,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
accommodation with a
fully
equipped kitchen would be mandatory.

If the above arrangement is not available in the Hall of Residence then I would not mind living with a local family who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
near the college. I would like to avoid daily long commuting to attend my classes and prefer a couple without children.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
notify me if you would like to have any additional information from my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
. Waiting to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
regarding the availability of the accommodation and
further
process to reserve it.

Yours
faithfully
,
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IELTS letter You are going abroad to study at a university. You need some information on accommodation for the duration of your course. Write a letter to the accommodation office. In your letter, - Tell them when you will arrive - Ask them about the types of accommodation they can offer, and - Explain to them what necessary things you may need

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
211 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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