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You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter ● explain your situation ● describe your problems ● tell him/her when you think you can start.

You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter ● explain your situation ● describe your problems ● tell him/her when you think you can start. VBy13
Dear Neil, I am writing to request you about to postpone the joining date of my job. I was working as oral surgeon in a multi-speciality hospital in karnal but it was far away from my home and so I planned to change this job. Finally i have gotten the job in your hospital and fortunately it is in the same city where i live. My cousin’s marriage has been fixed and it is being organized in Bombay in the next week because of which I have to go there with my family for a week. The train tickets has been booked, and hence the job can not be joined for some days. I would be able to join the work after some days after coming from Bombay. Most probably I would start my job on 1st of June. Apart from it, I am hard working person and I will work honestly. Thanking you Your Faithfully
Dear Neil,

I am writing to request you about to postpone the joining date of my job.

I was working as oral surgeon in a
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multi-speciality
hospital in
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karnal
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but
it was far away from my
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home and
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so
I planned to
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change
this
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job
.
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Finally
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i
have gotten the
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job
in your hospital and
fortunately
it is in the same city where
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i
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live
.

My cousin’s marriage has been
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fixed
and it is
being organized
in Bombay in the
next
week
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because
of which I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
go there with my family for a week. The train tickets has
been booked
, and
hence
the
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job
can not be
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joined
for
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some
days.

I would be able to
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join
the work after
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some
days after coming from Bombay. Most
probably
I would
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start
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
on 1st of June. Apart from it, I am
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
hard working
person and I will work
honestly
.

Thanking you

Your
Faithfully

IELTS letter You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to your new employer. In your letter ● explain your situation ● describe your problems ● tell him/her when you think you can start.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
155 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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