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You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park.Write a letter to the head of the city park department .In your letter: • Describe the problem with the trash • Explain why it is a problem • Say what you think the city should do.

You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park. Write a letter to the head of the city park department. In your letter: • Describe the problem with the trash • Explain why it is a problem • Say what you think the city should do. Gjbj
Dear Sir, This is to call your attention to the amount of trash in the park. I have noticed this for a while now as I love to go to the park most evenings with my kids to enjoy it’s nature and beauty. It’s been drawing lots of attention to birds and cats which eventually spread it all over the environment thereby making it impossible to relax or take a walk in. There are residents around the park with little children as well and the pollution caused by the pungent smell evolving from the trash is not hygienic which could in a way cause food poisoning. There used to be a time when the waste management company visits the park thrice every week, which has significantly reduced, I implore you to look into this and have them remove the waste every other day, this I’m sure would make the park a beautiful place to be once again. Hope to see positive changes soon. Your Faithfully Ayodeji.
Dear Sir,

This is to call your attention to the amount of trash in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
. I have noticed this for a while
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now
as I
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love
to go to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
most evenings with my kids
Did you mean "to enjoy its nature"?
to enjoy it’s nature
and beauty. It’s been drawing lots of attention to birds and cats which
eventually
spread it all over the environment thereby making it impossible to relax or take a walk in.

There are residents around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
with
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little
children
as well
and the pollution caused by the pungent smell evolving from the trash is not hygienic which could in a way cause food poisoning.

There
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used
to be a time when the waste management
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company
visits the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
thrice every week, which has
significantly
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reduced
, I implore you to look into this and have them remove the waste every other day, this I’m sure would
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make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
park
a
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beautiful
place to be once again.

Hope to
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see
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positive
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changes
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soon
.

Your
Faithfully


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IELTS letter You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park. Write a letter to the head of the city park department. In your letter: • Describe the problem with the trash • Explain why it is a problem • Say what you think the city should do.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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