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You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park.Write a letter to the head of the city park department .In your letter: • Describe the problem with the trash • Explain why it is a problem • Say what you think the city should do.

You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park. Write a letter to the head of the city park department. In your letter: • Describe the problem with the trash • Explain why it is a problem • Say what you think the city should do. 7lmX
Dear sir, My name is Niyi Jones, a resident of Westpoint estate. I am writing this letter to express my concern regarding a growing issue in the city park. I have been living in Westpoint for the last 4 years and frequently visit the city park to relax and spend quality time with family and friends. However, the recent rapid acceleration in population growth has led to a corresponding increase in littering of the public park. Therefore, the accumulation of garbage in the public park has not only adversely impacted the aesthetic value of the area but also causes health problems. Doctors at the Westpoint local hospital attribute the increase in the diagnosis of heart and lung conditions especially in children to the city park. To reverse this horrid development, in addition to deploying more garbage bins to strategic parts of the park, employing park managers would help significantly. These park managers will be stationed at the different parts of the park to enforce proper disposal of waste by visitors and also will be responsible for frequent cleaning of the park. I hope you enact these safe practices. Yours faithfully Niyi Jones
Dear sir,

My name is
Niyi
Jones, a resident of
Westpoint
estate. I am writing this letter to express my concern regarding a growing issue in the city park.

I have been living in
Westpoint
for the last 4 years and
frequently
visit the city
park
to relax and spend quality time with family and friends.
However
, the recent rapid acceleration in population growth has led to a corresponding increase in littering of the public park.

Therefore
, the accumulation of garbage in the public
park
has not
only
adversely
impacted the aesthetic value of the area
but
also
causes health problems. Doctors at the
Westpoint
local hospital attribute the increase in the diagnosis of heart and lung conditions
especially
in children to the city park.

To reverse this horrid development,
in addition
to deploying more garbage bins to strategic parts of the
park
, employing
park
managers would
help
significantly
. These
park
managers will
be stationed
at the
different
parts of the
park
to enforce proper disposal of waste by visitors and
also
will be responsible for frequent cleaning of the park.

I hope you enact these safe practices.

Yours
faithfully


Niyi
Jones
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IELTS letter You are bothered by the amount of trash in your local park. Write a letter to the head of the city park department. In your letter: • Describe the problem with the trash • Explain why it is a problem • Say what you think the city should do.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
191 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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