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You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You’ve not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter state your reason for writing, describe the problems and explain how you feel, propose a solution, and risk the landlord to take action.”

You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You’ve not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter state your reason for writing, describe the problems and explain how you feel, propose a solution, and risk the landlord to take action. ” bYr0q
Dear Mr Paul, I am student at English language collage and talent at your property. I am writing this to draw your attention that we are not getting hot water and our heating system is not working since 10 days. As you know that 10 days ago there was very heavy rain and since then our heating system is damage and it is not working. I have called you couple of the time but there was no response from your side. Finally, you have responded few day back and told us that you will sending a technician to fix heating system. Technical is eventually arrived yesterday and he tried to find the problem if heating system. Unfortunately he said that heating system is not reparable and suggested to replace with new one. You can imagine what kind of problem we are facing as we do not have a hot water. Also, the weather is so cold and it very difficult for me to take a shower, washing and cooking. My humble request to take this matter in your urgent attention and replace the heating system as early as possible. Yours faithfully, Lucias Christian.
Dear Mr Paul,

I am student at English language collage and talent at your property. I am writing this to draw your attention that we are not getting hot water and our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
is not working
Did you mean "for"? ('since' refers to a point in time, whereas 'for' refers to a period)
since
10 days.

As you know that 10 days ago there was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
heavy rain and since then our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
is damage and it is not working. I have called you couple of the time
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
there was no response from your side.
Finally
, you have responded few day back and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
told
us that you will
The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: "send"
sending
a technician to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
. Technical is
eventually
arrived
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
yesterday and
he tried to find the problem if
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
. Unfortunately he said that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
is not reparable and
The verb 'suggested' is used with the gerund form: "suggested replacing".
suggested to replace
with new one.

You can imagine what kind of problem we are facing as we do not have
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "hot water".
a hot water
.
Also
, the weather is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cold
and
It seems that a verb is missing.
it
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult for me to take a shower, washing and cooking. My humble request to take this matter in your urgent attention and replace the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
heating
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
as early as possible.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Lucias
Christian.

IELTS letter You are a student at an English language school in Brighton and are living in private accommodation with other flat mates. You’ve not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter state your reason for writing, describe the problems and explain how you feel, propose a solution, and risk the landlord to take action. ”

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