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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do. GML1B
Dear Sir, I am writing to express my deep concern regarding the cancellation of summer work placement programme. Currently, I am pursuing 1st year second semister in business english course at your university. As part of this course I suppose to be eligible to work during summer. Unfortunately, the sudden decision made by our university management created tension in me. Being an international student, I spent lot of my tution fees on this particular course for better carrier. This programme will help me to find an internship in a company for a period of time which will help me in finding a better job in the future. If you do not bring back this programme all my hard work and time will go waste. I put lot of expectations and hopes on this programme. I am requesting you to please extend this programme further till the end of this year. It would benefit me a lot and helps me in finding an employment in some company. I look forward to hearing from you Your’s faithfully, E. Santhosh
Dear Sir,

I am writing to express my deep concern regarding the cancellation of summer work placement
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programme
.
Currently
, I am pursuing 1st year second
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semister
in business
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english
course at your university.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
part of this course I
Probably you should use a past participle here: "supposed".
suppose
to be eligible to work during summer. Unfortunately, the sudden decision made by our university management created tension in me.

Being an international student, I spent
It seems that an article is missing.
lot of
my
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tution
fees on this particular course for better carrier. This
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
will
In informal texts, 'to' is not necessary. Do you mean "help me find"?
help me to find
an internship in a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
for a period of time which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me in finding a better job in the future. If you do not bring back this
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
all my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
work and time will go waste. I put
It seems that an article is missing.
lot of
expectations and hopes on this
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
.

I am requesting you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
extend this
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
further
till the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of this year. It would benefit me a lot and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
me in finding an employment in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
.

I look forward to hearing from you

Did you mean "Your" or "Yours"?
Your’s
faithfully
,

E. Santhosh
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IELTS letter You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

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