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You are a parent and you need information about a school trip your child is going on

You are a parent and you need information about a school trip your child is going on NV3Vm
Dear madamI am writing you to enquire about the school trip organized by the staff. I am a parent of one of your studentstudying in your primary school. My child name is shruthi and she is in first class. Recently i have got to knowabout a trip planned by the school for primary Students. I would like to know much about the trip details. Firstly. I am intrested to know about the dates of the trip. Ihope you haven't scheduled a long distance trip, especially in this winter. what type of transport have youdecided for the trip and finally the number of the students attending the trip. Do you also provide the food tothe children during the time of the trip. As you may not well aware of my child's health, she was not good with travelling a long distance in the past. Currently, my child is under meical observation due to her virological fever which attacked her last month. sothat she has to take her medicine during the day. please write to me about the information i asked for and alsomention whether caretaker can be appointed to look after the child during her trip. Looking forward to hear back from you, your's faithfulysander
Dear
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madamI
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am
writing you to
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enquire
about the school
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trip
organized by the staff. I am a parent of one of your
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studentstudying
in your primary school. My child name is
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shruthi and
she is in
first
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class
. Recently
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i
have
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got
to
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knowabout
a
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trip
planned by the school for primary Students. I would like to know much about the
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trip
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details
.
Firstly
. I am
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intrested
to know about the dates of the
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trip
.
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Ihope
you haven't scheduled a long distance
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trip
,
especially
in this winter.
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what
type of transport have
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youdecided
for the
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trip
and
finally
the number of the students attending the
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trip
. Do you
also
provide the food
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tothe
children during the time of the
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trip
. As you may not well aware of my child's health, she was not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
with travelling a long distance in the past.
Currently
, my child is under
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meical
observation due to her
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virological
fever which attacked her last month.
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sothat
she
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has to
take her medicine during the day.
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please
write to me about the information
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i
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asked for
and
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alsomention
whether caretaker can
be appointed
to look after the child during her
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trip
. Looking forward
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to hear
back from you,
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your's
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faithfulysander
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IELTS letter You are a parent and you need information about a school trip your child is going on

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
203 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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