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You are a member of a sports club located in an old building. The manager asked you to suggest some improvements to the building. Write a letter to your manager and say - Why the club is important to you? - What improvements should be made in the building and - How these changes would benefits the members?

You are a member of a sports club located in an old building. The manager asked you to suggest some improvements to the building. Write a letter to your manager and say - Why the club is important to you? - What improvements should be made in the building and - How these changes would benefits the members? 1n8mq
Dear Sir, I was really overwhelmed when you asked me about my suggestions for the improvement of the sports club. The club is really important for me as I usually spend time there with my family and friends while playing some of the indoor games such as table tennis, ludo, snakes and ladders, carom and chess. The condition of the club is not so good and does require refurbishment as there are pipe leakages from the ceiling. Even plaster in some parts of the ceiling is crumbled and walls are cracked which require quick attention and renovation. I think even the parking space which is not in use, can be converted into courts for lawn tennis and basketball, so that people can enjoy outdoor games as well. The giant store room can also be converted into a banquet hall for organizing small parties for club members. After all the refurbishments, the involvement of the members in this club will increase and the sports club can also generate revenue from the banquet hall which the members can book for their small occasions such as birthday parties or kitty parties. Hope you consider my suggestions. Yours faithfully, Jinal Thakrar
Dear Sir,

I was
really
overwhelmed when you asked me about my suggestions for the improvement of the

sports club.

The club is
really
important
for me as I
usually
spend time there with my family and friends while

playing
some of the
indoor games such as table tennis, ludo, snakes and ladders, carom and chess. The condition of the club is not
so
good
and does require refurbishment as there are pipe leakages

from the ceiling. Even plaster in
some
parts of the ceiling
is crumbled
and walls
are cracked
which

require quick attention and renovation. I
think
even the parking space which is not in
use
, can
be converted
into courts for lawn tennis and basketball,
so
that
people
can enjoy outdoor games
as well
. The giant store room can
also
be converted
into a banquet hall for organizing
small
parties for club

members.

After all
the refurbishments, the involvement of the members in this club will increase and the sports

club can
also
generate revenue from the banquet hall which the members can book for their
small


occasions such as birthday parties or kitty parties.

Hope you consider my suggestions.

Yours
faithfully
,
Jinal
Thakrar
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IELTS letter You are a member of a sports club located in an old building. The manager asked you to suggest some improvements to the building. Write a letter to your manager and say - Why the club is important to you? - What improvements should be made in the building and - How these changes would benefits the members?

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  American English
6 paragraphs
196 words
6.0
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