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You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. v.4

You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. v. 4

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to you to make the necessary arrangements for our stay at your hotel on 22nd and 23rd November. I will travel with my parents, wife and 7 years old son. I am hoping that you would be able to provide us with suitable accommodation and assist us to enjoy our trip. We will arrive on 22nd November and check out from your hotel on 24th November before 12. 00 pm. We are expecting two double size bedrooms with attached bathrooms, hot water and air cooler facilities. We would prefer rooms with sea view and room service. I would really appreciate if the rooms are on the same floor. I am also interested to know about recreational activities in the vicinity. Despite my parent’s age, they are very lively and would love to go to the theatre, beach and amusement parks, if available. I would also like to know about the market, where we can buy traditional items and souvenirs. Please notify me of the cost that will incur on our trip at your earliest with the facilities you can offer. I am expecting a comprehensive reply from your side about the details of activities and other information I requested. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Fahad Sultan

Dear Sir or Madam,

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make
 the necessary arrangements for our stay at your hotel on 22nd and 23rd November. I will travel with my parents, wife and 7 years This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ancientagedmature
old
 son. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am hoping that you would be able to provide us with suitable accommodation and assist us to enjoy our trip.

We will arrive on 22nd November and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
check
 out from your hotel on 24th November This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 12. 00 pm. We are expecting two double size bedrooms with attached bathrooms, hot water and air cooler facilities. We would prefer rooms with sea view and room service. I would really
 appreciate if the rooms are on the same floor.

I am also
 interested to know about recreational activities in the vicinity. Despite my parent’s age, they are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 lively and would This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :admireadore
love
 to go to the Possible spelling mistake. 'theatre' is British English.theater
theatre
, beach and amusement parks, if available. I would also
 like to know about the market, where we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 traditional items and souvenirs.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 notify me of the cost that will incur on our trip at your earliest with the facilities you can offer. I am expecting a comprehensive reply from your side about the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :particulars
details
 of activities and other information I requested.

I look forward to hearing from you This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
.

Yours faithfully
,

Fahad Sultan

2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter You and your family are planning to spend a weekend at a seaside hotel. v. 4

Letter

American English

8 paragraphs

217 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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