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you and some of the students recently organised a fashion show at your school to raise money for charity write an email to your friend about fashion show in you

you and some of the students recently organised a fashion show at your school to raise money for charity write an email to your friend about fashion show in you mXaLA
Dear Hawsa, How are you? Sorry I haven't written to you for so long because I was busy with an organisation. Anyways, I thought I'd drop you a line to tell you what happened so far. Me and my friends organised a fashion show raised for charity to help kids with lung cancer. As you know, I love helping people in need and seeing an opportunity to help someone coming my way, I won't love to miss it. My class had so much fun decorating the school playground. We added some colorful lights and pretty chairs. The tickets were cheap, it was a dollar per child and two dollars per adults. I couldn't believe my eyes when I saw many people actually came. Everyone had fun, eating, chatting and ofcourse watching the stunning models. It was great! That's all for now. Write soon and tell me about the lemon charity held in your country, everyone is talking about. Best wishes, Nada
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and my friends
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a fashion
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show
raised for charity to
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help
kids with lung cancer. As you know, I
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love
helping
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people
in need and seeing an opportunity to
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help
someone
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coming
my way, I won't
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to miss it.

My
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had
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much fun decorating the school playground. We
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added
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some
colorful lights and pretty chairs. The tickets were
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cheap
, it was a dollar per child and two dollars per adults.

I couldn't believe my eyes when I
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saw
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many
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people
actually came. Everyone had fun, eating, chatting and
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watching the stunning models. It was great!

That's all for
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now
. Write
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and
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tell
me about the lemon charity held in your country, everyone is talking about.

Best wishes,
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Nada
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IELTS letter you and some of the students recently organised a fashion show at your school to raise money for charity write an email to your friend about fashion show in you

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6 paragraphs
160 words
5.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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