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You have moved abroad for a new job. Write a letter to your friend to provide an update. In your letter, - describe life in your new country, - provide details about your new role - and make arrangements for your friend to visit.

You have moved abroad for a new job. Write a letter to your friend to provide an update. In your letter, - describe life in your new country, - provide details about your new role - and make arrangements for your friend to visit. lX0e1
Dear, Tom I have moved to Melbourne to get a new job that is my dream job. This town is cozy and the weather is so nice, people also very nice and slow life. Moreover, the beach is so beautiful. I really enjoy my new job at the moment that I am a manager of restaurant in the city of Melbourne, the salary pretty good that is much more than expected. Also, this town have a campaign is call work life balance that amazing and I have a plenty of time to enjoy my habit. I would like to invite you to visit Melbourne and I will plan for our trip to travel in Australia and the special animal that definitely you never seen in your life are kangaroos, also we can visit Sydney to see Opera house is the best land mark. Look forward to seeing you in Melbourne and can wait to see you and have a big hug with you. Best Wishes OHM
Dear, Tom

I have
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to Melbourne to
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a new job
that is
my dream job. This town is cozy and the weather is
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so
nice,
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people
also
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very
nice and slow life.
Moreover
, the beach is
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so
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beautiful
.

I
really
enjoy my new job at the moment that I am a manager of restaurant in the city of Melbourne, the salary pretty
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good
that is
much more than
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expected
.
Also
, this town have a campaign is call
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work life
balance that amazing and I have a
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plenty
of time to enjoy my habit.

I would like to invite you to visit Melbourne and I will plan for our trip to travel in Australia and the special animal that definitely you never
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in your life are kangaroos,
also
we can visit Sydney to
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see
Opera
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house
is the best land mark.

Look forward to seeing you in Melbourne and can wait to
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see
you and have a
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big
hug with you.

Best Wishes

OHM

IELTS letter You have moved abroad for a new job. Write a letter to your friend to provide an update. In your letter, - describe life in your new country, - provide details about your new role - and make arrangements for your friend to visit.

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
165 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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