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wrong deduction in leave count by Human resource department

Dear Mr. Omer, I hope this email finds you well, I am writing you to express my concern related to the leave balance deduction in GRPS system. I was on leave from 20th December-21 to 07th January-21, which accounts as 15 days out of 25 available days in my account as per oracle system. However, GRP systems currently reflects extra 5 days of leaves being reduced which bring the total of 20 days instead of 15. Although, I have sent a couple of emails to the HR department, which are attached for your reference. Kindly, If you could look into the matter and advise me on the same. I appreciate and trust your support. Yours Faithfully, Salem Al Balooshi
Dear Mr.
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Omer
,

I hope this email finds you well, I am writing you to express my concern related to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
balance deduction in GRPS system.

I was on
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
from 20th December-21 to 07th January-21, which accounts as 15 days out of 25 available days in my account as per oracle system.
However
, GRP systems
currently
reflects extra 5 days of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leaves
being
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
which bring the total of 20 days
instead
of 15.

Although, I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
a couple of emails to the HR department, which
are attached
for your reference.

Kindly, If you could look into the matter and advise me on the same.

I appreciate and trust your support.

Yours
Faithfully
, Salem Al
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Balooshi

IELTS letter wrong deduction in leave count by Human resource department

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