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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you were studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • Give details of your study plans • Explain why you want to get a part-time job • Suggest how your friend could help you to find a job

Dear Eric, Hope you're doing great and I am writing to enquire about part-time job opportunities in London as I am planing to persue my Masters in Cambridge university. My course would commence by 1st week of March, so I am will be in London a week prior to it and have already arranged for accomdation on university portal. I have opted for Masters in Big data, as this would be of add on advantage for my career. I have applied for a scholarship too, as it would be tough for me to pay the lumpsum amount with my current saving. As I am running in sort of money, a part-time job would make my life easier. It would also help me meet my day-to-day expenses and save some for the next fee payment too. By working on part-time I would also get more references, which would help me get job easier in future in London. Working and studying also would help me learn to balance time in much better way. Though I've already done a initail search in university website on local job oppertunities and listed a few, but I don't find it very suitable for me. Since you're staying in same city for about 10 years now, you would be the apt person to help me in this. I would like you to suggest me a few employee friendly jobs which are near the univeristy as this would save me a lot of time from travelling. I am really excited to be in London and looking forward to meet you soon. Best Regards, Stefan Joseph

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Best Regards,

Stefan Joseph