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Writing letter to museum director for voluntary work

Writing letter to museum director for voluntary work 7POlY

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing this letter in response to your requirement of unpaid voluntary work in the museum and would like to sign-up for this pleasant opportunity. This work will allow me not only to learn more about the museum and history but also help me gain credits for ongoing history project in the university. I have been on look-out for such a practical learning experience and looks perfect fit for me. Although I am sure that my accounting skills can be helpful but alongside competent knowledge of historical events would certainly be beneficial for leading guided tours. Moreover I have little experience of working as part time tourist guide which may add value. Since I have my university classes up to 4 PM, I would be available between 5 PM to 7 PM on Tuesday through Thursday and would be glad to join immediately. Looking forward for your positive response. Yours Faithfully Sasha

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing this letter in response to your requirement of unpaid voluntary work in the museum and would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :indication
sign
-up for this pleasant opportunity.

This work will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 me not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 to learn more about the museum and history This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 me gain credits for ongoing history project in the university. I have been on look-out for such a practical learning experience and looks perfect fit for me.

Although I am sure that my accounting This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :proficiencies
skills
 can be helpful This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 alongside competent knowledge of historical This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionshappenings
events
 would certainly
 be beneficial for leading guided tours. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Moreover,
Moreover
 I have This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
little
 experience of working as This word is normally spelled with hyphen.part-time
part time
 tourist guide which may This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accrue
add
 value.

Since I have my university classes up to 4 PM, I would be available between 5 PM to 7 PM on Tuesday through Thursday and would be glad to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :consolidatefuse
join
 immediately.

Looking forward for your This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
positive
 response.

Yours Faithfully


Sasha

IELTS letter Writing letter to museum director for voluntary work

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

154 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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