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Write a letter to the railway officer of your city for departure late .

Write a letter to the railway officer of your city for departure late. JVpmD
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to complain about a serious delay created by a local railway station. Which has cost me my job. Last Sunday I went to Chandigarh by National express to appear an interview for a job. However, there was a small dispute between the staff and management. The staff went on an immediate strike. Which, was called the only after six hours. Owing to this, I was late by Seven hours, when I was reached Chandigarh. I was one of the two candidate to be interviewed for the job. But as, I reached I was informed that the an other candidate was appointed. I tried hard to explain my problem, but the management decisions remain unchanged. I feel frustrated as my career has been ruined. I loss a great opportunity because of, such a silly reason. I feel that all those involved in delay should be penalized so that, they understand their responsibilities. I hope this letter will awaken the management to serve the community in a better way. Yours faithfully, Jhon.
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to complain about a serious delay created by a local railway station.
“Which” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Which
has cost me my job. Last Sunday I went to Chandigarh by National express to appear an interview for a job.
However
, there was a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
dispute between the staff and management. The staff went on an immediate strike. Which,
was called
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
after six hours. Owing to this, I was late by Seven hours, when I
was reached
Chandigarh. I was one of the two candidate to
be interviewed
for the job.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
as, I reached I
was informed
that the
This word is normally spelled as one.
an other
candidate
was appointed
. I tried
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
my problem,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
the management decisions remain unchanged. I feel frustrated as my career has
been ruined
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
Did you mean "lost" (past tense of the verb 'lose')?
loss
a great opportunity
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of, such a silly reason.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
feel that all those involved in delay should
be penalized
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that, they understand their responsibilities.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope this letter will awaken the management to serve the community in a better way. Yours
faithfully
,
Possible spelling mistake found.
Jhon
.

IELTS letter Write a letter to the railway officer of your city for departure late.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
177 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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