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Writing a letter to manager for computer system problem

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Dear Sir, I am having a network issue for a long, i can't able to upload my files on cloud because of this issue. Moreover, for each and every upload, it's taking more duration due to poor internet connection many times it's getting filed and I am not able to complete my work on time. Particularly when I am sending large file taking too much time to send. Therefore, if management provide saperate LAN connection it will better for me to complete my task. Atleast required some wifi access which is better than shared network, Regards, Sugumatr S
Dear Sir,

I am having a network issue for a long,
Did you mean "I"?
i
can't able to upload my files on cloud
because of this
issue.

Moreover
, for each and every upload, it's taking more duration due to poor internet connection
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
times it's getting
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
filed and
I am not able to complete my work on time.
Particularly
when I am sending large file taking too much time to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
.

Therefore
, if management provide
Possible spelling mistake found.
saperate
LAN connection it will
Did you mean "be better"?
better
for me to complete my task.
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Atleast
required
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Did you mean "Wi-Fi"? (This is the officially approved term by the Wi-Fi Alliance.)
wifi
access which is better than shared network,

Regards,

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Sugumatr
S
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IELTS letter Writing a letter to manager for computer system problem

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  American English
6 paragraphs
97 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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