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Writing a letter to manager for computer system problem

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Dear Sir, I am having a network issue for a long, i can't able to upload my files on cloud because of this issue. Moreover, for each and every upload, it's taking more duration due to poor internet connection many times it's getting filed and I am not able to complete my work on time. Particularly when I am sending large file taking too much time to send. Therefore, if management provide saperate LAN connection it will better for me to complete my task. Atleast required some wifi access which is better than shared network, Regards, Sugumatr S

Dear Sir,

I am having a network issue for a long, Did you mean "I"?I
i
 can't able to upload my files on cloud because of this
 issue.

Moreover
, for each and every upload, it's taking more duration due to poor internet connection This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 times it's getting Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).filed, and
filed and
 I am not able to complete my work on time. Particularly
 when I am sending large file taking too much time to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
.

Therefore
, if management provide Possible spelling mistake found.separateoperateaspiratereiteratesaturateaerate
saperate
 LAN connection it will Did you mean "be better"?be better
better
 for me to complete my task. Possible spelling mistake found.At least
Atleast
 required This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
Did you mean "Wi-Fi"? (This is the officially approved term by the Wi-Fi Alliance.)Wi-Fi
wifi
 access which is better than shared network,

Regards,

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Sugumatr
 S

IELTS letter Writing a letter to manager for computer system problem

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

97 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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Lexical Resource: 6.0

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

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