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Write an email to your friend to tell about your house.

Write an email to your friend to tell about your house. PW02p
Dear Dan, I am writing this letter to give you great news on my newly purchased house. I hope you are doing well and sorry for not being in touch for such a long time. I was too busy in moving to new house. As you know, our old house was not that specious and had only two bedrooms. With addition my baby girl we needed a bigger house. Neighborhood was also not that great and it was very far from Ben's office. It took long time to buy this new house, but believe me this is great one! My son is very happy to be at this new house. We have 3 specious bedrooms, a big size living and dining room and a fully equipped kitchen. My baby girl has a great space to crawl. It has a small backyard with a pet house for our doggy - Raju. More importantly, this new house is very close to Ben's office. Now he is starting late to office and reaching back home early. Ben is also happy to give quality time for us, instead of wasting his time on long travel and traffic jams. This Sunday, if you are available please visit our new house; I am sure you will like it. We can have a lunch together with our families. We will also like to get your creative ideas for decorating our kid's rooms. Please find the address as below. E8-1103, Lake Town, Near Hyde Park, Harrow. See you soon! Lots of love Suzane
Dear Dan,

I am writing this letter to give you
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great
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news
on my
newly
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purchased
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house
. I hope you are doing well and sorry for not being in touch for such a long
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time
.
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I
was too busy in moving to
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new
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house
.

As you know, our
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old
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house
was not that specious and had
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only
two bedrooms.
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With
addition my baby girl we needed a bigger
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house
. Neighborhood was
also
not that
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great
and it was
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very
far from Ben's office. It took long
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time
to
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buy
this
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new
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house
,
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but
believe me this is
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great
one! My son is
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very
happy to be at this
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new
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house
. We have 3 specious bedrooms, a
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big
size living and dining room and a
fully
equipped kitchen. My baby girl has a
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great
space to crawl. It has a
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small
backyard with a pet
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house
for our
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doggy
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-
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Raju
.

More
importantly
, this
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new
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house
is
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very
close to Ben's office.
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Now
he is starting late to office and reaching back home early. Ben is
also
happy to give quality
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time
for us,
instead
of wasting his
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time
on long travel and traffic jams.

This Sunday, if you are available
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please
visit our
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new
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house
; I am sure you will like it.

We can
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have a lunch
together with our families. We will
also
like to
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get
your creative
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ideas
for decorating our kid's rooms.
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Please
find the address as below.

E8-1103, Lake Town, Near Hyde Park, Harrow.

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See
you
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soon
!

Lots of
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love


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Suzane

IELTS letter Write an email to your friend to tell about your house.

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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