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Write an email to Pat tell him about a computer game you like.

Write an email to Pat tell him about a computer game you like. OyGXN
Hi Pat, How are you? Well, I have received your email you sent to me few days ago and I like this topic so much. As you know, there are many vanious genres of games are produced to help people relax and feel comfortable after worked hard. Today, I'm going to propose a game that is quite popular in my nation which was one of my favourites. That called Play Together. I've been playing it for about five months and enjoy it since it makes me fun and adds more new friends. This game will allow you to meet many people from over the world and if you feel bored, you can dance with your friends by your character in game. The character are cute and their clothes so dazzing. Especially, you can go fishing, dig treasure or you can steal something from someone else's house. In addition, anyone can have a personal favourite so I hope you can try and like it as much as I enjoyed. See you soon, Natty
Hi Pat, How are you? Well, I have received your email you
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much. As you know, there are
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that is
quite popular in my nation which was one of my
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makes
me fun and
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more new friends. This game will
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you to
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meet
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people
from over the world and if you feel bored, you can dance with your friends by your character in game. The character
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cute and their clothes
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, you can go fishing, dig treasure or you can steal something from someone else's
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house
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, anyone can have a personal favourite
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like it as much as I enjoyed.
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See
you
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Natty
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IELTS letter Write an email to Pat tell him about a computer game you like.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
171 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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