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Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. • What you heard about the inconvenience from the staffs. • How you feel about it. • What suggestion can you give.

Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. • What you heard about the inconvenience from the staffs. • How you feel about it. • What suggestion can you give. GMJyQ
Dear Sir, I Mrs. Nidhi Doshi an employee of your company; I am from administration department based out at Mumbai main office. I am writing this letter on behalf of all my colleagues and would request you to start a cafeteria for all the staff. I have heard a lot of concerns from our staff that due to unavailability of cafeteria at our location people are not getting enough space to have their lunch or breakfast they need to have at their work station. They need to order the food from outside which is very inconvenient during this ongoing Covid situation and risk of spread of contagious diseases also rises if the delivery person is suffering from it. If there is cafeteria within the organisation the employees does not have to go out or there will be no need to order the food from outside; they will get variety of eatable option, all kind of refreshment like tea, coffee everything within one roof top, people from different department can get to know eachother if the cafeteria is placed. I look forward to hear from you regarding this issue, hope necessary actions would be taken on the advices provided above. Your’s faithfully, Nidhi Doshi
Dear Sir,

I Mrs.
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Nidhi
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Doshi
an employee of your
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company
; I am from administration department based out at Mumbai main office. I am writing this letter on behalf of all my colleagues and would request you to
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start
a
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cafeteria
for all the staff.

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I
have heard
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a lot of
concerns from our staff that due to unavailability of
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cafeteria
at our location
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people
are not getting
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enough
space to have their lunch or breakfast they need to have at their work station. They need to order the food from outside which is
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very
inconvenient during this ongoing
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Covid
situation and
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risk
of spread of contagious diseases
also
rises if the delivery person is suffering from it. If there is
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cafeteria
within the
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organisation
the employees does not
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have to
go out or there will be no need to order the food from outside; they will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
variety of eatable option, all kind of refreshment like tea, coffee everything within one roof top,
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people
from
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different
department can
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get
to know
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eachother
if the
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cafeteria
is placed
.

I look forward
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to hear
from you regarding this issue, hope necessary actions would
be taken
on the advices provided above.

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Your’s
faithfully
,

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Nidhi
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Doshi
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. • What you heard about the inconvenience from the staffs. • How you feel about it. • What suggestion can you give.

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6 paragraphs
202 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
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