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Write a letter to your landlord regarding a water problem. Explain the problem. How are you affected by this? What do you want the landlord to do?

Write a letter to your landlord regarding a water problem. Explain the problem. How are you affected by this? What do you want the landlord to do? PVaOj
Dear Ms Begg, I am writing to inform you that the main water pipe burst on 1 May 2018 in the apartment I rented and I require you to take immediate action to remedy the situation. On 1 May 2018 at 10. 00 a. m. , I noticed a large seepage of water on the kitchen floor, and traced the source to a spot on the kitchen wall. I immediately called the building superintendent for his assistance. The building superintendent’s investigation revealed that the main water pipe running through the apartment had burst, and he turned off the water mains to ensure the situation did not become more dire. Unfortunately, that meant that I have had no access to water in my apartment since. In addition, when the leak happened, the water spread onto some books that I had kept in the kitchen, and completely ruined them as the pages are now stuck together. I would appreciate if you could send a plumber over immediately to repair the main pipe, at your cost. Please inform me in writing by tomorrow when your plumber will be able to attend to the matter. In addition, I would also like you to replace the books that have been damaged by the leak. I have enclosed a list of the titles with this letter, as well as pictures of the damaged books for your perusal. Please feel free to contact me on my mobile phone if you need further information or need to discuss the situation. Thank you. Yours sincerely, Christine Gee
Dear Ms
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Begg
,

I am writing to inform you that the
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main
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water
pipe burst on 1 May 2018 in the apartment I rented and I require you to take immediate action to remedy the situation.

On 1 May 2018 at 10. 00 a. m.
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,
I noticed a large seepage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
on the kitchen floor, and traced the source to a spot on the kitchen wall. I immediately called the building superintendent for his assistance. The building superintendent’s investigation revealed that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
pipe running through the apartment had burst, and he turned off the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mains
to ensure the situation did not become more dire. Unfortunately, that meant that I have had no access to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
in my apartment since.
In addition
, when the leak happened, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
water
spread onto
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some
books that I had
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
kept
in the kitchen, and completely ruined them as the pages are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
stuck together.

I would appreciate if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a plumber over immediately to repair the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
pipe, at your cost.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
inform me in writing by tomorrow when your plumber will be able to attend to the matter.
In addition
, I would
also
like you to replace the books that have
been damaged
by the leak. I have enclosed a list of the titles with this letter,
as well
as pictures of the damaged books for your perusal.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
feel free to contact me on my mobile phone if you need
further
information or need to discuss the situation. Thank you.

Yours
sincerely
,

Christine Gee

IELTS letter Write a letter to your landlord regarding a water problem. Explain the problem. How are you affected by this? What do you want the landlord to do?

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
257 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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