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Write a letter to your friend whose son will go on holidays to your country. In your letter: Invite the son to stay with you. Give some advice about things to do.

Write a letter to your friend whose son will go on holidays to your country. In your letter: Invite the son to stay with you. Give some advice about things to do. DqXoa
Dear Rahul, How’re you? Hope you’re hale and hearty. I’m writing this letter to express my happiness. As I’ve heard that your son is coming to visit India. I hope your son is coming first time in India after a long time. My son will go to an airport to pick him. As he is also in his same age, they can enjoy together. I have 3 bed rooms apartment where your son can stay with. Since you don’t need to worry for his accommodation, he will not even feel alone while living us. I merely advice you’re son that he must bring his medicine, provided that he takes. Another thing is that keep with him some warm clothes. As in India winter season is going on, he doesn’t need to buy any clothes from here. My son has even vacation so he can show him some places of India. Such as, Golden Temple, the Statue of Unity and the Taj Mahal. I’m looking forward to meeting yours son. Yours friend, Deepak.
Dear Rahul,

How’re you? Hope you’re hale and hearty. I’m writing this letter to express my happiness.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
I’ve heard that your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
is coming to visit India.

I hope your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
is coming
first
time in India after a long time. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
will go to an airport to pick him. As he is
also
in his same age, they can enjoy together. I have 3 bed rooms apartment where your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
can stay with. Since you don’t need to
The verb 'worry' does not normally take the preposition 'for'. Did you mean "worry about"?
worry for
his accommodation, he will not even feel alone while living us.

I
A verb is probably missing after 'merely'.
merely advice
Did you mean "your"?
you’re
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
that he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
bring his medicine, provided that he takes. Another thing is that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
with him
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
warm clothes. As in India winter season is going on, he doesn’t need to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
any clothes from here. My
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
son
has even vacation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
he can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
him
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
places of India. Such as, Golden Temple, the Statue of Unity and the Taj Mahal.

I’m looking forward to meeting yours son.

Yours friend,

Deepak.
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your friend whose son will go on holidays to your country. In your letter: Invite the son to stay with you. Give some advice about things to do.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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