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Write a letter to your friend living abroad to help you financially. Tell him about your concerns and amount of money you require

Write a letter to your friend living abroad to help you financially. Tell him about your concerns and amount of money you require Lblwp
Dear Sam, It has been a long time since we met last. I hope you are doing good there. I heard about your recent promotion through uncle and I am glad to know about it. I would like to let you know about my recent loss in business. It was going well till July 2021 but after that one of our partners left with the money to be used for business, we tried a lot to find him and logged a police complaint but nothing has happened till now. As a result of this, we had to take loan from Bank and due to recession we were unable to pay installments for last three months. It would be a great help if you can lend me some money, around 1 lac. It will help me to pay pending installments. Further, we will be starting our new product next month which can regain the loss. I will repay the money to you within six months time span. Thanking you in advance for help. Yours faithfully Nitin Gohel
Dear Sam,

It has been a long time since we met last. I hope you are doing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
there. I heard about your recent promotion through
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
uncle and
I am glad to know about it.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know about my recent loss in business. It was going well till July 2021
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
after that one of our partners
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
with the money to be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
for business, we tried a lot to find him and logged a police complaint
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
nothing has happened till
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
.

As a result
of this, we had to take loan from Bank and due to recession we were unable to pay installments for last three months.

It would be a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
if you can lend me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
money, around 1 lac. It will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to pay pending installments.
Further
, we will be starting our new product
next
month which can regain the loss. I will repay the money to you within six months time span.

Thanking you in advance for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

Yours
faithfully


Nitin
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Gohel
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your friend living abroad to help you financially. Tell him about your concerns and amount of money you require

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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