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write a letter to the manager of a hotel where you stayed and left two important things.

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Dear sir, I am writing this letter to request you to reconsider the decision of closing cafeteria. My name is Jobanjeet Singh and I am working in your company from last year. There are many reasons of low usage of cafeteria in last few years. First and foremost, going cafeteria is not cheap these days because price of everything is getting high. Secondly, there are not much facilities to relax such as television and radio. Moreover, homemade food is preferred by our staff. Cafeteria is better place to relax in your time as you soak tonnes of pressure while working. Even though, there are phones and internet available to everybody while, others prefer to sit in cafe and have breakfast. Once, café closed permanently the anxiety level will go up in some staff members. We can make some changes as I have some ideas. We can offer some healthy homemade food in our menu at lowest prices which makes our staff come to eat here. we can add a TV and radio so that they can have fun as well. I hope you will take my request into your consideration. yours faithfully, jobanjeet singh.
Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to request you to reconsider the decision of closing cafeteria.

My name is
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Jobanjeet
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Singh and
I am working in your
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company
from last year.

There are
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many
reasons of low usage of cafeteria in last few years.
First
and foremost,

going cafeteria is not
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cheap
these days
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because
price of everything is getting high.

Secondly
, there are not
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much
facilities to relax such as television and radio.
Moreover
, homemade food
is preferred


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by
our staff.

Cafeteria is better place to relax in your time as you soak tonnes of pressure while working.
Even though
, there are phones and internet available to everybody while, others prefer to sit in
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cafe
and have breakfast.
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Once
, café closed
permanently
the anxiety level will go up in
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some
staff members.

We can
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make
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some
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changes
as I have
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some
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ideas
. We can offer
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some
healthy homemade food in our menu at lowest prices which
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makes
our staff
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come
to eat here.
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we
can
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add
a TV and radio
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so
that they can have fun
as well
.

I hope you will take my request into your consideration.

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yours
faithfully
,

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jobanjeet
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singh
.

IELTS letter write a letter to the manager of a hotel where you stayed and left two important things.

Letter
  American English
12 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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