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Dear Sir, I am writing because I heard that your museum is looking for people for part-time voluntary work from my friend. I would love to apply for the unpaid job Firstly, I would like to let you know that since my childhood I have been traveling to museums and my passion was to collect information about the pieces that are kept on the museum. People come a long way to visit the museum especially kids and I know how exactly they think and what they want. This fascinates me. In addition, I want to spend my leisure time with something that would give me pleasure also in the museum which is situated just right next to my house. Let me give you a little brief about my qualities. I had done some voluntary work previously in another museum involves guiding people throughout the museum and giving them information about the museum pieces. My job was also to get reviews of my work from the people I have provided service. In which I have scored great at my job which might be useful for your

Dear Sir, I am writing because I heard that your museum is looking for people for part-time voluntary work from my friend. I would love to apply for the unpaid job Firstly, I would like to let you know that since my childhood I have been traveling to museums and my passion was to collect information about the pieces that are kept on the museum. People come a long way to visit the museum especially kids and I know how exactly they think and what they want. This fascinates me. In addition, I want to spend my leisure time with something that would give me pleasure also in the museum which is situated just right next to my house. Let me give you a little brief about my qualities. I had done some voluntary work previously in another museum involves guiding people throughout the museum and giving them information about the museum pieces. My job was also to get reviews of my work from the people I have provided service. In which I have scored great at my job which might be useful for your RBPP
Dear Sir, I am writing because I heard that your museum is looking for people for part-time voluntary work from my friend. I would love to apply for the unpaid job Firstly, I would like to let you know that since my childhood I have been traveling to museums and my passion was to collect information about the pieces that are kept on the museum. People come a long way to visit the museum especially kids and I know how exactly they think and what they want. This fascinates me. In addition, I want to spend my leisure time with something that would give me pleasure also in the museum which is situated just right next to my house. Let me give you a little brief about my qualities. I had done some voluntary work previously in another museum involves guiding people throughout the museum and giving them information about the museum pieces. My job was also to get reviews of my work from the people I have provided service. In which I have scored great at my job which might be useful for your job too. I have much interest to do the job and in every week I have three classes although I am free the other three days (Sunday, Tuesday and Thursday) from 10 a. m. to 8 p. m. Looking forward to getting a feedback from you. Sincerely, Moushume Chowdhury.
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involves guiding
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throughout the
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and giving them information about the
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pieces. My
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was
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reviews of my work from the
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which might be useful for your
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and in every week I have three classes although I am free the other three days (Sunday, Tuesday and Thursday) from 10 a. m. to 8 p. m.

Looking forward to getting a feedback from you.

Sincerely
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IELTS letter Dear Sir, I am writing because I heard that your museum is looking for people for part-time voluntary work from my friend. I would love to apply for the unpaid job Firstly, I would like to let you know that since my childhood I have been traveling to museums and my passion was to collect information about the pieces that are kept on the museum. People come a long way to visit the museum especially kids and I know how exactly they think and what they want. This fascinates me. In addition, I want to spend my leisure time with something that would give me pleasure also in the museum which is situated just right next to my house. Let me give you a little brief about my qualities. I had done some voluntary work previously in another museum involves guiding people throughout the museum and giving them information about the museum pieces. My job was also to get reviews of my work from the people I have provided service. In which I have scored great at my job which might be useful for your

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