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Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable.

Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable. pRJB9
Dear sir, I am Harry, a local resident of Warwick town. Through a local newspaper article, I got to know about the swimming pool to be built in our town. First of all, on behalf of all the residents, I am thankful to you for asking our opinion for the location of pool. I am writing this letter to give my opinion about the same. swimming pool was the most required and lacked facility of our town, which you are going to fulfill soon. Summer vacations are approaching and we are glad that this summer our kids will have their own swimming pool, unlike previously they had to visit their friend's or relative's house to practice swimming. This swimming pool will be of great importance, as we can practice swimming there and spend our spare time doing something adventurous. As per my opinion, it should be built in the middle of town because it will be easily reachable hence more utilized. Mothers or grand parents could easily drop their kids for swimming class otherwise they have to be dependent on fathers to drive them there. Also if the swimming pool is in the center of town it will bring more income to the town as compared to outside town. On the other side, if swimming pool is built outside town it will not be of much benefit to us. As it will be tough for kids to commute there daily. It will also not add to the economic income of our state. I hope you will consider my suggestion seriously and choose center of town as final location for swimming pool. your sincerelyHarry
Dear sir,

I am Harry, a local resident of Warwick
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town
. Through a local newspaper article, I
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in our
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First of all
, on behalf of all the residents, I am thankful to you for asking our opinion for the location of
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pool
. I am writing this letter to give my opinion about the same.

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swimming
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pool
was the most required and lacked facility of our
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town
, which you are going to fulfill
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soon
. Summer vacations are
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
approaching and
we are glad that this summer our kids will have their
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own
swimming
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pool
, unlike previously they had to visit their friend's or relative's
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house
to practice swimming. This swimming
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pool
will be of great importance, as we can practice swimming there and spend our spare time doing something adventurous.

As per my opinion, it should
be built
in the middle of
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town
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because
it will be
easily
reachable
hence
more utilized. Mothers or grand parents could
easily
drop their kids for swimming
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class
otherwise
they
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have to
be dependent on fathers to drive them there.
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Also
if the swimming
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pool
is in the center of
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town
it will bring more income to the
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town
as compared to outside
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town
. On the other side, if swimming
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pool
is built
outside
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town
it will not be of much benefit to us. As it will be tough for kids to commute there daily. It will
also
not
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add
to the economic income of our state.

I hope you will consider my suggestion
seriously
and choose center of
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town
as final location for swimming pool.

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your
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sincerelyHarry
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IELTS letter Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable.

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