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Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable.

Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable. 0Apj1
Dear Sir/Madam, I am delighted to learn that you are planning to build up a new swimming pool in our community. I am writing this letter to offer my suggestion. As you must be aware, in the fast-paced urban lifestyle leisure activities are very important to individuals in order to maintain a good health. In our society, it is a lack of facilities for the citizens conducting exercises. Also, I believe that the new pool can motivate the individuals to perform regular exercises and it raises the public awareness of the significance of regular body training. Most importantly, I would suggest that the pool should be built up in the inner city as it is convenient for people to access. Consequently, even after working, the citizens can be able to relax their bodies and ease their minds. I would be grateful if you take my proposal into serious consideration. Yours faithfully, Jenny Chan
Dear Sir/Madam,

I
am delighted
to learn that you are planning to build up a new swimming pool in our community. I am writing this letter to offer my suggestion.

As you
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must
be aware, in the
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fast
-paced urban lifestyle leisure activities are
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very
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important
to individuals in order to maintain a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
health. In our society, it is a lack of facilities for the citizens conducting exercises.
Also
, I believe that the new pool can motivate the individuals to perform regular exercises and it raises the public awareness of the significance of regular body training.

Most
importantly
, I would suggest that the pool should
be built
up in the inner city as it is convenient for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to access.
Consequently
, even after working, the citizens can be able to relax their bodies and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ease
their minds.

I would be grateful if you take my proposal into serious consideration.

Yours
faithfully
, Jenny Chan

IELTS letter Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable.

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