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You work for an international company.You would like to spend six months working in the head office in another country.Write a letter to your manager *Explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months. *Say howw your work could be done when you are away. *Ask for his/her help in arranging it.

You work for an international company. You would like to spend six months working in the head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager *Explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months. *Say howw your work could be done when you are away. *Ask for his/her help in arranging it. n6NPE
Dear sir, My name is John Smith and I am working as a Mechanical Engineer from the last one year in your company which is in India. But due to lack of necessary equipments I want to spend six months in your head office which is in the U. S. A. It will not only enhance my skills but also improve my knowledge related to my field so that I could effeciently implement on my work. Moreover it will give me a chance to meet with experienced and older staff members to gain more knowledge. In my absence, my colleague will help me to share my work and I will also try to work online as much as possible. I had also discussed with my team members and HR manager and requested them to make it possible for me as soon as possible. I look forward for your kind consideration. Yours sincerelyJohn Smith
Dear sir, My name is John
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Smith and
I am working as a Mechanical Engineer from the last one year in your
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company
which is in India.
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But
due to lack of necessary equipments I want to spend six months in your head office which is in the U. S. A. It will not
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only
enhance my
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skills
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but
also
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improve
my knowledge related to my field
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so
that I could
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effeciently
implement on my work.
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Moreover
it will give me a chance to
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meet
with experienced and older staff members to gain more knowledge.

In my absence, my colleague will
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help
me to share my work and I will
also
try to work online as much as possible. I had
also
discussed with my team members and HR manager and requested them to
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make
it possible for me as
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soon
as possible.

I look forward for your kind consideration.

Yours
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sincerelyJohn
Smith

IELTS letter You work for an international company. You would like to spend six months working in the head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager *Explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months. *Say howw your work could be done when you are away. *Ask for his/her help in arranging it.

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