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You have been advised by the manager to conduct a short session in school and share your work experience with the students. Write a letter to the headmaster of the school and say - Who are you and what kind of job do you do? - What are you planning to talk about? - What equipment will you need to use?

You have been advised by the manager to conduct a short session in school and share your work experience with the students. Write a letter to the headmaster of the school and say - Who are you and what kind of job do you do? - What are you planning to talk about? - What equipment will you need to use? oR6o9
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Mari X and I am writing this letter about a short demonstration of my work that I want to conduct at your schools. I am a web developer at Alg Company. As the name suggests I design and develop websites for companies, especially e- commerce websites. As it is known to everybody, web programming is the one of popular jobs in IT world. Recent statistics show the rate of students that enrolled in this major is increased. Therefore, I am going to talk about requirements which students interested should meet them. In addition, I would like to present them how write a simple website. I am very appreciate if you could prepare some equipment before meeting. I need a projector for my presentation. Moreover, if I could access to the WIF, it will be great. Please do not be hesitate and call me to arrange a meeting. My cellphone number is 1234568. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Mari X.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Mari
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
X and
I am writing this letter about a short demonstration of my work that I want to conduct at your schools. I am a web developer at
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Alg
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Company
. As the name suggests I design and develop websites for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
,
especially
e- commerce websites.

As it
is known
to everybody, web programming is the one of popular jobs in IT world. Recent statistics
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the rate of students that enrolled in this major
is increased
.
Therefore
, I am going to talk about requirements which students interested should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
them.
In addition
, I would like to present them how write a simple website.

I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
appreciate if you could prepare
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
equipment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
meeting. I need a projector for my presentation.
Moreover
, if I could access to the WIF, it will be great.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
do not be
Consider using a past participle here: "hesitated".
hesitate
and call me to arrange a meeting. My cellphone number is 1234568. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Yours
faithfully
,

Mari X.
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IELTS letter You have been advised by the manager to conduct a short session in school and share your work experience with the students. Write a letter to the headmaster of the school and say - Who are you and what kind of job do you do? - What are you planning to talk about? - What equipment will you need to use?

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  American English
7 paragraphs
169 words
6.0
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