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there was a picnic for Canada Day

there was a picnic for Canada Day 2RbkJ

Dear Community Picnic Organizer, It was such a memorable experience to attend the picnic last week. The event offered the opportunity for community members to socialize and celebrate together for Canada Day with delicious food which everyone brought. However, there is a crucial need for potluck food to include a list of ingredients with them. There are community members who have various kinds of allergies. Personally, nuts and seafood are my allergens so they can trigger mild to fatal reactions like itchiness and difficulties in breathing. Therefore, having a list that clearly stated the used ingredients for others to read before eating can avoid people's allergies. For next year's potluck, I highly recommend the picnic organizer to gather information for dishes' ingredients before the event. With the information, booklets about the dishes can also be prepared and handed out for participants to be careful with their allergens. Thank you for considering my recommendation and looking forward to hearing from the picnic organizer. Meg Brown

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Picnic
 Organizer,

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picnic
 last week. The This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
 offered the opportunity for community members to socialize and celebrate together for Canada Day with delicious food which everyone brought.

However
, there is a crucial need for potluck food to include a list of ingredients with them. There are community members who have various kinds of allergies. Personally
, nuts and seafood are my allergens This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 they can trigger mild to fatal reactions like itchiness and difficulties in breathing. Therefore
, having a list that clearly
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used
 ingredients for others to read This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 eating can avoid This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
's allergies.

For next
 year's potluck, I highly
 recommend the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbarbecueoutingexcursioncookout
picnic
 organizer to gather information for dishes' ingredients This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:previouslyprior to
before
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionhappening
event
. With the information, booklets about the dishes can also
be prepared
 and handed out for participants to be careful with their allergens.

Thank you for considering my recommendation and looking forward to hearing from the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbarbecueoutingexcursioncookout
picnic
 organizer.

Meg Brown